Tuesday, February 20, 2007

[WIP] untitled;

music: sadame for piano // sato naoki (xtv soundtrack)
mood: cold


prompts: whisper, rain;


Yukino found her on the steps, drenched to the bone, both feet bare under her tattered dress. Though apparently asleep, the sandal in her hand, it's strap broken, was clutched between her fingers, the knuckles pale and white as if tensed from holding on. Her long, black hair clung to her face and shoulders like seaweed, and long black lashes were frail crescent moons carrying transparent, little pearls of water.

The youjo had knelt down slowly, the sound of laughter drifting out from The Firefly House somewhat hushed by the steady rush of late February rain. Winter was leaving, and with the promise of warmer months more and more wandered into The Village of Respite in the hopes of finding some beautiful young thing to while the nights away with.

"Just a little while longer, please,"

The whisper startled Yukino, but not as much as the sightless eyes that opened for her to see. "I won't linger very long." The murmur was soft and hoarse, as if short of all voice had left her. She watched, her umbrella still clutched in her own hand, as the girl straightened, and Yukino noticed for the first time the leather case that sat quiet on her lap.

"Just until the rain stops," Trembling hands lifted to brush away her matted hair, and her face remained as impassive as a porcelain mask. When the hand fell away, the fingers settled protectively over the edge of the case, curling in like hooks to keep it there.

"Please...?"

4 comments:

kamylle ♠ said...

This makes you want to beg Yukino to just take her in and have mercy on the poor thing. The broken sandal is extremely evocative of the hardships she must have gone through, and her subsequent words only emphasize that. She has come a long ways and traveled very great distances until she came here, and she did it, all alone, and blind, at that. It's a really great indication of her inner strength.

To be honest, I find it a little on the short side - but then again, the last piece you wrote was a pretty long one for a drabble, so I can't complain.

Can't wait till you get the next one up!

liquid poetry ♡ said...

I wasn't quite sure whether making it longer would have been a good thing, since there's not much else going on in the scene.

I'm glad you like it though. :) My only concern, I think, is whether or not I'm getting Yukino right. I know this is too short to actually determine that, but still... :)

kamylle ♠ said...

Don't worry, you're getting her just perfect, as far as I can see. It'd be nice to see a bit more of her in the next drabbles, though... And maybe some Shichiroji on the side?

*winkwink*

liquid poetry ♡ said...

XD Don't worry, I have something up my sleeve... *is mysterious*